This is probably a bit different from this stuff normally posted on here, but I thought I'd give it a shot. I have a scene in the film I wrote (now on draft #3) and there is a scene where all of the characters go to a restaurant while visiting a friend in a new place. Basically, I feel dialogue is my weak-point and could use some help from the experts of food on this one. Is it realistic? What could I add to the argument to make it easier for people to relate to it.
THANKS A LOT to whoever takes the time to read...
*WARNING* There is mild language which I have ****ed out. If anyone has an issue I will remove it.
CUT to a MCU of Nick picking up the hamburger and putting it to his mouth. He stops and looks up ahead of him.
CUT to a MCU of Steve looking at him, shaking his head.
I canít believe you got a hamburger.
That is blasphemy in these parts!
Sorry, Iím just not a breakfast person.
CUT to LS of the whole table.
Hey Jay, can you pass me the ketchup?
Jason grabs the ketchup from against the wall and passes it to Nick. Steve intersects the pass and grabs the ketchup.
Hold on hold on. Let me just make this
point. Am I wrong guys? When you go to
visit someone in a new place and they
take you out somewhere to eat, is it
not an unwritten law that you should
get what the recommend to you? To me
itís just plain rude. Trevor, back me
up on this one. CUT to MS on Trevor who is choking down the bite of food in his mouth.
Yeah, man. Itís like when you invite
someone to come over your house to watch
a movie and you have something you really
love picked out and they tell you theyíd
rather watch something else, even though
they havenít seen it yet. You make a
recommendation to them because you think
they will love it, and then they shoot
it down before they even give it a chance
it is the same thing as saying, ďHey man,
I donít trust your judgment enough to even
give it a shot.Ē Just plain insulting. CUT to WS of the group.
Oh thatís bull**** man, itís completely
different than a movie. When it comes
to food, no one knows you better than you
know yourself. They can recommend some
broccoli dish to you all they want, but
in the end you still hate broccoli, even
if it is smothered in cheese.
Brian does have a point. CUT to MS of Trevor and Steve.
Jason, Iíll k*ll you. Shush.
No. Seriously. Everyone likes
breakfast. No one likes broccoli.
Donít act like thatís not true.
I like broccoli.
Bull****. Broccoli smells like a
rotten foot and if you put cheese
on it, it just tastes and smells
like a soggy rotten foot. The fact
is that itís disrespectful when
someone takes you out to eat at
their home and you refuse to consider
CUT to MS of Brian and Jason. Brian throws up his hands in disagreement.
Just drop it man. Whatever. Give the
poor kid his ketchup and let him
eat his hamburger.
Steve looks at Nick.
Sorry man. Here, enjoy your d***ed
<3 Steven J.