foodisfood
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This is probably a bit different from this stuff normally posted on here, but I thought I'd give it a shot. I have a scene in the film I wrote (now on draft #3) and there is a scene where all of the characters go to a restaurant while visiting a friend in a new place. Basically, I feel dialogue is my weak-point and could use some help from the experts of food on this one. Is it realistic? What could I add to the argument to make it easier for people to relate to it.
THANKS A LOT to whoever takes the time to read...
*WARNING* There is mild language which I have ****ed out. If anyone has an issue I will remove it.
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CUT to a MCU of Nick picking up the hamburger and putting it to his mouth. He stops and looks up ahead of him.
NICK
CUT to a MCU of Steve looking at him, shaking his head.
NICK
CUT to LS of the whole table.
Nick
Jason grabs the ketchup from against the wall and passes it to Nick. Steve intersects the pass and grabs the ketchup.
STEVE
Hold on hold on. Let me just make this
BRIAN
Oh that’s bull**** man, it’s completely
JASON
NICK
TREVOR
Bull****. Broccoli smells like a
CUT to MS of Brian and Jason. Brian throws up his hands in disagreement.
BRIAN
Steve looks at Nick.
STEVE
Sorry man. Here, enjoy your d***ed
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<3 Steven J.
THANKS A LOT to whoever takes the time to read...
*WARNING* There is mild language which I have ****ed out. If anyone has an issue I will remove it.
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CUT to a MCU of Nick picking up the hamburger and putting it to his mouth. He stops and looks up ahead of him.
NICK
What?
CUT to a MCU of Steve looking at him, shaking his head.
STEVE
I can’t believe you got a hamburger.
I can’t believe you got a hamburger.
That is blasphemy in these parts!
NICK
Sorry, I’m just not a breakfast person.
CUT to LS of the whole table.
Nick
Hey Jay, can you pass me the ketchup?
Jason grabs the ketchup from against the wall and passes it to Nick. Steve intersects the pass and grabs the ketchup.
STEVE
Hold on hold on. Let me just make this
point. Am I wrong guys? When you go to
visit someone in a new place and they
take you out somewhere to eat, is it
not an unwritten law that you should
get what the recommend to you? To me
it’s just plain rude. Trevor, back me
up on this one.
CUT to MS on Trevor who is choking down the bite of food in his mouth.
TREVOR
(still chewing)
Yeah, man. It’s like when you invite
someone to come over your house to watch
a movie and you have something you really
love picked out and they tell you they’d
rather watch something else, even though
they haven’t seen it yet. You make a
recommendation to them because you think
they will love it, and then they shoot
it down before they even give it a chance
it is the same thing as saying, “Hey man,
I don’t trust your judgment enough to even
give it a shot.” Just plain insulting.
CUT to WS of the group.
BRIAN
Oh that’s bull**** man, it’s completely
different than a movie. When it comes
to food, no one knows you better than you
know yourself. They can recommend some
broccoli dish to you all they want, but
in the end you still hate broccoli, even
if it is smothered in cheese.
JASON
Brian does have a point.
CUT to MS of Trevor and Steve.
STEVE
Jason, I’ll k*ll you. Shush.
Jason, I’ll k*ll you. Shush.
No. Seriously. Everyone likes
breakfast. No one likes broccoli.
Don’t act like that’s not true.
NICK
I like broccoli.
TREVOR
Bull****. Broccoli smells like a
rotten foot and if you put cheese
on it, it just tastes and smells
like a soggy rotten foot. The fact
is that it’s disrespectful when
someone takes you out to eat at
their home and you refuse to consider
their recommendation.
CUT to MS of Brian and Jason. Brian throws up his hands in disagreement.
BRIAN
Just drop it man. Whatever. Give the
poor kid his ketchup and let him
eat his hamburger.
Steve looks at Nick.
STEVE
Sorry man. Here, enjoy your d***ed
hamburger.
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<3 Steven J.