Chief Longwind Of The North
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I have finished proofreading my latest SF novel attempt. I've jsut completed making the pitch that I will send to a number of literary agents along with a summary and the manuscript. The pitch has to be perfect as it is what initially interests the agent, helping him/her decide whether to even look at the summary and manuscript. So, I'm placing the pitch out here to all of you for a quick critique.
Background: The story is about a group who discover that we, humankind, has aroused a terrible force that has the power to erase humanity for the universe. The problem is that most of humankind won't accept the threat and want to keep on doing things the way they always have. In fact, the corporations want to eliminate our good guys so that they can continue raking in profits, no matter the environmental costs.
So here's the pitch. Let me know what you think.
Humankind has spread itself over thousands of worlds, and in the process, awakened a force more powerful than anyone could ever have imagined. The fate of humanity rests with a young family, an assassin, a politician, and a handful fo scientists. They will have to overcome the relentless and dangerous power of greedy interstellar corporations before they can even begin to save humanity from annihalation.
Would this pique your interest? How can it be made better? Thanks in advance for the critique.
Seeeeya; Goodweed of the North
Background: The story is about a group who discover that we, humankind, has aroused a terrible force that has the power to erase humanity for the universe. The problem is that most of humankind won't accept the threat and want to keep on doing things the way they always have. In fact, the corporations want to eliminate our good guys so that they can continue raking in profits, no matter the environmental costs.
So here's the pitch. Let me know what you think.
Humankind has spread itself over thousands of worlds, and in the process, awakened a force more powerful than anyone could ever have imagined. The fate of humanity rests with a young family, an assassin, a politician, and a handful fo scientists. They will have to overcome the relentless and dangerous power of greedy interstellar corporations before they can even begin to save humanity from annihalation.
Would this pique your interest? How can it be made better? Thanks in advance for the critique.
Seeeeya; Goodweed of the North